tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9016603191533255832.post954978055231245911..comments2024-01-02T22:46:29.288-05:00Comments on Musings: Personal Narrative Poems on Poetry FridayJoyce Rayhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02905709719444916488noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9016603191533255832.post-4949357118200706572015-08-12T12:04:25.106-04:002015-08-12T12:04:25.106-04:00Thanks for dropping by, Somerset Spa Girl. I appre...Thanks for dropping by, Somerset Spa Girl. I appreciate knowing what works well and that the words help you see the scene.Joyce Rayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02905709719444916488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9016603191533255832.post-59371402405478539952015-08-12T10:29:32.025-04:002015-08-12T10:29:32.025-04:00This poem is so visually intriguing, it really hel...This poem is so visually intriguing, it really helps me paint a picture in my head, and the contrast between 'I never knew you' and 'I knew you' works really well.Somerset Spa Girlhttp://www.holbrookhouse.co.uk/somerset-spanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9016603191533255832.post-30979469964929030572013-04-21T18:44:52.387-04:002013-04-21T18:44:52.387-04:00I love comparing your details to the photo -- so r...I love comparing your details to the photo -- so rich and specific, as are your memories. I'm wondering how it will work to add invented memory to a personal narrative...Mary Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09078793537148794310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9016603191533255832.post-9137652000262112842013-04-21T16:59:49.975-04:002013-04-21T16:59:49.975-04:00Hope you're feeling better, Joyce! Great idea,...Hope you're feeling better, Joyce! Great idea, writing from photos - especially ones packed with familial emotions & images. I really like the line "A wedding ring says you’ve already married my grandmother." Matt Forrest Esenwinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04230063389130167424noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9016603191533255832.post-372907304179383292013-04-20T12:41:11.697-04:002013-04-20T12:41:11.697-04:00Irene and Carol, your comments about the last stan...Irene and Carol, your comments about the last stanza help me see where revision needs to be. In writing from photos, it's tempting to spend too much time describing the picture when the real focus needs to be on one's response to the subject. Thank you for your feedback!Joyce Rayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02905709719444916488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9016603191533255832.post-75629891468788584322013-04-20T09:34:46.509-04:002013-04-20T09:34:46.509-04:00I love the idea of writing from family photos. The...I love the idea of writing from family photos. The details in this poem, e.g. the kitchen that smells like applesauce and popcorn, really bring this poem to life. And like Irene, I especially love the last stanza.Hope you are on the road to recovery. Carolhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13294455230627182656noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9016603191533255832.post-39189937323170951532013-04-19T15:47:23.313-04:002013-04-19T15:47:23.313-04:00How wonderful is this picture that you've crea...How wonderful is this picture that you've created for us? I love especially that last stanza with little you, your cowbell world. Thank you for sharing, and hope you are healing well!Irene Lathamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04905936104127707762noreply@blogger.com